tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post9013632245964880268..comments2023-12-21T08:53:00.190-05:00Comments on Forever In Hell: Major Lulz from the Sheltered - Chapter 1PersonalFailurehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03034292023591747601noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-68664190044817079192010-05-12T02:04:26.355-04:002010-05-12T02:04:26.355-04:00Jerry. Just thinking his name made her picture him...<b>Jerry. Just thinking his name made her picture him in his mind. Right out of highschool they had begun dating. They had been dating for about six months before...</b><br /><br />This is utterly amazing. Here we have her innermost, deepest thoughts about her boyfriend, <i>right after she learns she's pregnant</i>, and yet I can't hear a scintilla of emotion in the description. No record of how she feels about him, or him about her. It's absurdly cold and clinical.<br /><br />Of course, the reason is simple: "Jerry" is a plot device, not a character.Quasarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09398018171200335379noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-76878857525676534722010-05-12T00:37:47.215-04:002010-05-12T00:37:47.215-04:00"She had never really been open with her moth..."She had never really been open with her mother before, so that was pretty easy to say."<br /><br />Gosh if her mother had have been an open Christian mother then she would have been taught about birth control and wouldn't be in this situation....oh wait...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-67802766351340726482010-05-11T19:15:33.076-04:002010-05-11T19:15:33.076-04:00This is like religion class in my high school. It...This is like religion class in my high school. It really is.Cynical Nymphhttp://cynicalnymph.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-11724429459357253552010-05-11T11:14:07.557-04:002010-05-11T11:14:07.557-04:00ZOMG, I actually snorted on the unoriented thing.
...ZOMG, I actually snorted on the unoriented thing.<br /><br />This reminds me, my girlfriend and I are about to have a baby boy at the end of the month. My parents don't like the idea we are living together without being married, but are happy about having a grandkid. I never once thought they would disown me and they are fundies.BeamStalkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17772110446629492132noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-63435441056549459722010-05-11T11:09:55.209-04:002010-05-11T11:09:55.209-04:00You know, that actually could be a lot worse. I me...You know, that actually could be a lot worse. I mean, yeah, it's fan-fiction level writing, but at least the people act and react like people...Michael Mockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06233321050691782148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-90545296669230176902010-05-11T10:21:55.397-04:002010-05-11T10:21:55.397-04:00Fear not, Chapter 2 published today.Fear not, Chapter 2 published today.PersonalFailurehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03034292023591747601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-21499914208937454442010-05-11T10:20:35.472-04:002010-05-11T10:20:35.472-04:00This becomes a scene straight out of Hell House if...This becomes a scene straight out of Hell House if in chapter 2 she kills herself. Good Grief.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04103446055814911491noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1334761054277672365.post-47267778309114078022010-05-11T10:16:15.553-04:002010-05-11T10:16:15.553-04:00Please tell me you are going to take this book on ...Please tell me you are going to take this book on slacktivist style. I really enjoy your blog particularly when you are deconstructing other's works and am looking forward to your take on chapter 2.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com